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I don't know where this came from..it just came to me. This is partially for ~Darth-Kyiser, as he's the one who suggested I write something. Does anyone think I should have put a Mature warning on this? If so, I will do so.

I suppose it's Joker-based, but I don't know how real/canon it is. I don't think you would have to have seen The Dark Knight to like this, if you were inclined to haha.

I love comments, especially critiques. Hint, hint, please. Especially since this hasn't been edited at all. And favs are always welcome if you enjoyed a piece...

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:icondarthvicky6:
...hmm....very...descriptive...lol. Nice actually. Very ...well written. And yes I do like The Dark Knight. ;D
:icontiraldan:
Thank you! I'd love any suggestions you have to offer, but I'm quite glad that you like it nonetheless.

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:iconsetep-ka-tawy:
I'm not sure if I'm correctly expressing this, but this seems so.... you. Interpret that how you want.

Now, I'm REALLY curious about this. I find myself wanting to know more. Lots more. Just about who these people are, what their circumstances are, why are they like this?

I like how you combined a stark sort of prose with many minute details - it brings out the dark feel of the piece.

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And Re said, "Let me take Set up with me, to dwell with me and be my son. He shall thunder in the sky and be feared."
:icontiraldan:
Watch the movie, The Dark Knight! I guarantee it will help. Hehe.. Either that or I could change it so it's not Joker and make up my own story about more of it..but I don't think I want to- now, at least.

And I guess it's good that I can put myself in my writing...I shall take it as a compliment.

And thanks as always, mon..mon amie.

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:iconsetep-ka-tawy:
You're very welcome, PBB. :hug:

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And Re said, "Let me take Set up with me, to dwell with me and be my son. He shall thunder in the sky and be feared."
:icongiraffe-mango:
Epic! Until the why so serious bit, i had no idea! :giggle:
I like how it's prose, but still a bit poetic in the formatting and just the style in general. The ending's really cool too. Just kind of...trails off...
I agree with Setep as well, very you. :mwahaha:

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:iconjaimed1968:
I think this was rather dramatic. I see a lot of pain, emotion and hurt. Looks good for being a rough draft/unedited. Awesome. I can see this being similar to the Joker, though I've not seen the Dark Night yet.

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:icontiraldan:
Once again I'm gonna decide that the "very you" bit is a compliment. :D

Thanks much, I guess it is sorta poetic there. I didn't mean to heh.

:whisper:The Joker's awesome:whisper:

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:icontiraldan:
You gotta go watch that, Jai. It's an awesome movie.
And thanks, glad you like.

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:iconhik-r:
I like it...
And I don't know what to say some more.
you don't mind, if i translate your fic on rus?
with copyrights, ofcourse.

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